Scandalous
To reminisce, the life we shared
memory carved in stone
So bittersweet, to have love lost
if only I had known
My heart
forever, torn apart
star-crossed
honor did meander
betrothed forsaken, unrepaired
drowned in sea of slander
© ~ Randy Bell ~ 2012
Kerry O’Connor has challenged us to write in Robert Herrick’s stanza form
cloudfactor5
Dec 30, 2012 @ 18:22:39
The ending drips regret. Nice use of the form.
Dec 30, 2012 @ 19:02:27
The turn in the last two lines did it for me ~
Nice work on the form ~
Grace
Dec 30, 2012 @ 19:58:14
Excellent use of the form; The ending saddens.
Dec 30, 2012 @ 22:36:21
Beautiful work with the form!
Dec 31, 2012 @ 00:54:27
You rocked this form. Very Herricky:)
Dec 31, 2012 @ 02:30:52
This is a painful theme, and the form really elevates it to something universal, which any reader can appreciate.
Dec 31, 2012 @ 09:49:14
Yup! The classic feel of this takes this devastation up to a universal level. Powerful language!
Dec 31, 2012 @ 15:10:28
Very well done. I could feel it all happening.
K
Dec 31, 2012 @ 16:12:11
“Honor did meander.” —oooh, Nice phrasing.
Jan 01, 2013 @ 16:28:40
“drowned in sea of slander” lived that… well I found shore eventually.