Pogroms de Lune-acy
Thanksgiving was coming
Superstorm Sandy stole our heat
going cold turkey
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as vultures lurk
trying to outsource our work
your paycheck shrinks
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Patti Smith wrote
song to solve economic problems
called “Free Money”
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Life’s a stripteaser
doing it just for you
metaphorical pole dance
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I’ve fallen down
and I can’t get up
Well Done bartender !!
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Devil may care
to angel of my dreams
wife’s different phases
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© ~ Randy Bell ~ 2013
Today Samuel Peralta / Semaphore has asked us to write a single or string of lunes in whatever variation we like.
In Jack Collom’s variation of the lune, words are counted instead of syllables, and the structure is a count of 3-5-3 words.
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Jan 03, 2013 @ 17:53:04
I really enjoyed these, Randy. So many different moods. I laughed aloud about the falling and can’t get up one. Very clever fare. Well done all around.
Jan 03, 2013 @ 18:06:04
Very nice snapshots of the form ~ I specially like life’s a strip teaser ~
Jan 03, 2013 @ 18:57:58
Interesting array of snapshots from all areas of life. Nice.
Jan 03, 2013 @ 19:16:37
Enjoyed reading these snapshots of life. The last one really made me smile
Jan 03, 2013 @ 19:18:47
I really enjoyed these Randy, but can’t tell which are by Patti and which by you!? I’m assuming last ones by you? They are all quite cool. k.
Jan 03, 2013 @ 20:02:51
They’re all by me I was just mentioning a song called ” Free Money” by Patti Smith
Jan 03, 2013 @ 20:11:00
Ah. Okay. k.
Jan 03, 2013 @ 20:11:14
Very nice. k.
Jan 03, 2013 @ 21:20:29
Sandy definitely stole some much needed heat and light–made it hard for some to give thanks. I particularly enjoyed the stripteaser and bartender lunes.
Jan 03, 2013 @ 22:50:45
You’ve just demonstrated the power of the lune form to structure succinct satirical or humorist verse, something which hasn’t been shown yet in the previous poems I’ve read tonight. Well done!
Jan 03, 2013 @ 23:04:36
Wonderful array of stanzas
Jan 04, 2013 @ 02:35:36
haha..the Life’s a stripteaser, doing metaphorical pole dance…so good
Jan 04, 2013 @ 21:17:57
…free money… haha… yes… you entertained with all of these… quite of a clever offering… smiles…
Jan 04, 2013 @ 21:17:57
These are just too clever!